Brighter Than a Shooting Star

It was that invisible glowing tunnel

That stopped my tears from shedding

And my words of life-cursing

 

It was formed right before my eyes

Dropped down from the sky

Containing a creature slowly descending

Within the brightness of the edges of the tunnel

A bright circled spotlight was then reflected

Only a couple of inches away from me

For it to reach the top of my exposed roof

Like a royal angel

 

It took forever, or moments until it earthly reached me

I could tell it was a visitor

Or perhaps an angel fallen from the sky

Visiting me! While I cried alone

I couldn’t blink, and miss moments of the prepared arrival

 

There was an intense sound of unseen sparkles

Right before it gracefully reached

Preparing to land

On the spotlight which was reflected

Only few inches away from me

 

I was surprised, to see she was me

Older, with wrinkles of wisdom

and smaller eyes

With a smile, much wider than mine

Filling the air with a scent of glory

And wings.. That covered the extent of my sight

 

My heart was beating so fast

And my tears were prisoned of excitement

I was gazing delightfully, still confused

Did not know what to expect

Feeling adrenalized

 

I was surprised, to see she was me

She was hope

Looking me in the eyes

Holding the armor of power and success

Silently telling me to hold on to life

And smile

For at the end of the tunnel

There is always light

 

I was surprised, to see she was me

Reminding my youthful self

That without the darkness of the sky

We wouldn’t have admired the stars

© 2011 ALIA SULTAN

35 thoughts on “Brighter Than a Shooting Star

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  1. “I was surprised, to see she was me.. She was hope, looking me in the eyes.. Holding the armor of power and success”
    I have never read a more inspiring line. One day soon, you will hold that armor, only it will be made of gold and rubies instead.

  2. Thank you for such an awesome, powerful piece! 🙂 I enjoyed it a lot! I liked the twist from an angel to your own inner self. … I think that made me like your piece more … it is good and healthy to see yourself from such an angle.

    Cheers,
    🙂

    PS: I will keep checking for your updates. … iLike your blog!

  3. Thank you for your kind words Elyas. I portrayed “a promise of a bright future” as an angel. To clarify my thought, if a person had this image of oneself, then determination to a successful future would build up.
    I don’t want you to think I’m an egotist 😛 hehe.
    Please do, I hope to read more of your comments !

    1. I don’t think it comes out as ego-driven piece. Quite the opposite…

      “To clarify my thought, if a person had this image of oneself, then determination to a successful future would build up.” Yes, that is what I got out of it and that is why I liked it! 🙂

      Keep writing! … and I wish I could read your Arabic (?) entries. 😛 I am getting more reasons to take my Arabic studying ambition quite seriously. 🙂

      Btw … am adding your blog to my list … fyi 🙂

      Cheers

      1. Will do so, and I hope to read more of your feedback on what I will post.
        I encourage you to do so, Arabic poetry is so beautiful and powerful. Thank you Elyas ! I subscribed to your blog 🙂

      2. My hope is to one day read “One Thousand and One Nights” (The Arabian Nights) in its original form … and of course all the other great literatures that continue to inspire generations. 🙂 … Inshalah 😀

  4. Alia S, I loved this piece! what i found so endearing was that “she was me”, wonderful. You captured the essence of the Light very well. When I had my near-death experience, the Light that came to me was filled with such radiant love, peace, joy and comfort that I wish I could describe it well enough for people to really understand, but I can’t. I guess that has to wait for heaven itself to show them. Peace and blessings 🙂

    1. Thank you for your lovely words, I’m glad you liked it.
      I wish you could try to describe your experience in a poem or a story.
      I am glad it was just an experience and I hope you are better now :).
      Please stop by more often !

  5. miss alia… i can’t just believe … oh my god.. it was awesome… if someone can actually write complexed lines with intricate feelings and still be simple and to the point at the same time, it can be none other than you… awesome work..

  6. Wow! This piece is quite a magical journey. Reflective and uplifting! I agree with the other commenter, Elyas, about the transition from angel to self, and felt that this aspect was very powerful. Loved it!

    1. Thank you so much for your comment Christine ! I’m glad you liked it. I hope you liked my other posts too 🙂 Looking forward to read more of your feedback !

  7. Elyas: InshAllah you will, I suggest you read some of Jubran Khalil Gibran’s work, he is a well-known Lebanese poet, writer and artist. A lot of his work is translated to English. Enjoy ! 🙂

  8. Alhamdulillah, You really do have a way with words sister. Glad to have come across your blog and totally appreciate the words of support you left on mine. Keep up the brilliant work! San’aa Sultan

  9. Haha…I don’t think I have to tell you how good it is with all those comments 🙂
    It’s really powerful senpai (senior)
    Really glad you came to visit my blog, because I got to see your marvelous work XD
    I’ll come visit again

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